Soul Cleanse

Honestly, I have no tether at all to this poem. I must've dipped into someone else's stream when I captured it.

My wish is a knife

to tear a hole in a star

and bleed it.

With its blinding energy

glistening hot and cleansing

I'd wash my soul free of you.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

That's a whole lot of something going on in six lines, Mark. Well done, no matter whose stream you were fishing in. Great work.

[Mark]

Thanks hon :)

[Leslie Philibert]

very big imagery here, that goes straight to an emotional crises, good write !

[Mark]

Thank you so much sir!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It feels like deep buried hurt. Lancing the boil of long held pain hence the star as stars are so far away yet they symbolise our dreams as we yearn to touch them. Flowing and emotive piece Mark

[Mark]

Thank you brother. :)

[Nia Hope]

That is really... I'm not sure that powerful is the right word but dark doesn't quite fit it either. Wonderful job nonetheless!

[Mark]

Thank you :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow such bitterness caught in these few lines..powerful...and makes me ponder, what color would the stars bleed?

[Mark]

glistening white.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really glistening!

[Kristin Lee]

I love this one. Soul cleanse is such a fitting title. Beautiful imagery.

[Mic]

A wish I'd love to have shared with an ex, once upon a time. Very well done, Mark.

[Mark]

Thank you, glad you could relate.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is an interesting idea... The first stanza is starkly tangible in imagery...a knife cutting a hole in a star and "bleeding it"--reminds me a little of what a hunter would do to an animal they are just beginning to field dress. The second stanza goes on to discuss the "heart" of the matter; taking that blood of a star and washing your soul so that you can finally be pure and free from turmoil, including the memories that haunt you.

This is a haunting write. I love the blending of quiet desperation and tangible decision making. Very creative.

[Mark]

Thank you very much :)