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Modern American

These moments are pierced by jagged light 

and thunder rolls slowly behind them.

Why am I in Georgia...

when you are not?

The storm allows the night to hang 

preventing the sun to make day.

My day looks bleak

from this Walmart parking lot.

Cheerful golden arches beckon

like a gingerbread house.

Oh, I am not well and

Walmart doesn't open for hours.

Author's Note

Reviews

[CagedEnigma]

Wonderfully written. And the song chosen just feels so right while reading this.
''Why am I in Georgia...
when you are not?''
Simple yet so powerful, these two lines.

[Mark]

thank you CE. I'm glad you like it :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Namaste Mark, this one is really amazing small and really great work :)
Lines I really loved -
My day looks bleak
from this Walmart parking lot.
Cheerful golden arches beckon
like a gingerbread house.
Oh, I am not well and
Walmart doesn't open for hours.
- Singh :)

[Mark]

Namaste Vikrantsingh ! Thank you for reading. I"m glad you enjoyed it.

[Baby Ricochet]

No metaphor could be more desolate than an empty wal mart parking lot in Georgia. Outstanding work sir

[Mark]

heeehee... ya you said it. Thanks for reading :)

[Jack...]

Very cool Mark. The loneliness and sadness of sleeping alone, parked in a Walmart parking lot is evident. The view of McDonalds as the sunrise is understood.

[Mic]

Mickey D's as a gingerbread house...really ain't no sunshine when she's gone. Well done, Mark.

[Mark]

Thanks Mic. I figured Hansel and Gretel would've been better off without theirs, and i know I would be without mine.

[Frieda P]

Good choice, thought it was going to be MIdnight Train to Georgia.....

[Mark]

'cuz I'm broken... when I'm open'... I don't know why I think that fits the work, but I don't always have reasons.

[Frieda P]

"The heart has reasons which reason knows nothing of." I forget who wrote that quote but I wish I did..................

[Frieda P]

Geez Mark, you're depressing me....what a bleak read for this overcast Monday. Feel better, and where's that song, waiting on the music to perk up my spirits now! ;-)

[icelandicblue]

When the golden arches are the most pleasing thing around you know you need a change of scenery. I think you've done a great job describing our suburban and urban landscapes topped with stormy skies...it's not always a pretty sight.

[Mark]

Thank you Iceland. I'm glad you saw what I was trying to paint. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of deep thoughts in the poem. Hard to have distance from people we need. Make us ponder too many odds things. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mark]

yes, I often ponder odd things. Part of my make up I suppose. Thanks for reading :)