Explosion Blues

a rather splintered dream sequence

I rushed out with you

stripped naked in a dream

the sky poked holes it's true

Lit us up like strawberry cream.

To the red house, baby,

in the red house was the scene

Watching for explosions

you knew, know what I mean.

We ran down main street

out in the night all fire clean

We ran, pulling the wind

all the way to the Dairy Queen.

Rushing through the wind

cutting the air 'til it scream

no dirty laugh, oh you know baby,

we prayed it was a dream.

Rushing past where we been

the park grass, soft and green.

Watch for the explosion baby

standing naked by the Dairy Queen.

Yesterday it was home

now our broken dome

is only water

boiled into steam.

Author's Note

I don't know if there is much in the way of depth in this work. Mostly it just kind of poured out in a blues riff sort of way.

Reviews

[s y e]

In some way this could be a song Mark. I loved this one. Your imagery is extremely vivid.

[Mark]

I had been listening a lot to White Stripes. I hadn't realized just how good Jack White is and it put me in a blues frame of mind so I wrote that way. :)

[Mockingbird]

it is pretty bluesy. very lyrical. imagery that puts a smirk on my lips.

[Mark]

ya? That's good! LOL

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Striking imagery and loose wording lend to the ease of reading, well done.

[Mark]

Thank you Thomas, again. :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, this has a stream-of-consciousness feeling, disjointed hippe touch.

[Mark]

Thanks Leslie, it was pretty much stream-of-consciousness.

[TL Boehm]

fascinating. My dreams are disjointed like this. I've not written about them in years. Since the 80's actually. Love the color in this. I've heard not everyone dreams in color.

[Mark]

Glad you like it! :) I don't often remember my dreams, and even when I do they are gone 5 minutes later LOL

[icelandicblue]

I feel the blues in this one. It makes sense to me...those dreams where everything comes together in a scenario with snippets of truth in an unlike setting. Happens to me. But still the blues aspect of the piece is the major driving force behind the words.

[Mark]

Thank you Ice. My dreams, when I remember them, are always like that. Weirdness with snippets of truth LOL

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It has a reminiscent quality to it with a sad reflection and yearning for the past. Needs a little crafting to eliminate the 'forced' rhymes! Lol

[Mark]

You can't have blues without rhyme :P

[Pryde Foltz]

A short story is trying to get out … methinks. Great poem, too.