Just One More Chance

Ever want to be young again with the mind and heart you have now?

I pour a cup of borrowed time

into the hour glass.

Once I gulped from an ocean

but now I sip from the pond.

Too many concentric rings

and the banks got wet.

Too many pilgrims

and not enough sandals.

Where did the sand go?

Somewhere is a beach

filled with the granular

memories of what has been.

I push against the tide

wanting to go back,

to know what I know

and to live again.

I need a  do-over.

Reviews

[s y e]

I think it would be extremely cool if you could be younger with the mind and heart you have now. I think if that were to happen, certain things would be vastly improved because we would know the effects it has on families and friends, right? Maybe we wouldn't hurt as many people as we have growing up and not make the stupid mistakes we did as a kid... This made me think Mark.

I loved it. My favourite of yours so far!

[Mark]

As always your wisdom is far beyond your years!

[s y e]

All thanks to these amazing poems I read from my boy ;-P

[Jack...]

I think we all feel this way at times. Very cool Mark.

[Little Birdie]

Too many pilgrims
and not enough sandals.

Well, there's a way of saying it. What a poem, dissecting loneliness and despair and I would lie if I said that line didn't make me think hard. Thank you for this. Hope you're not one of those pilgrims missing their sandals.

[Mark]

Thank you. I just hope the sand doesn't burn.

[dw817]

⊰ℛℛ⊱
Very nicely done, Mark. Definite personification of loneliness.
Here's hoping sunny days and happier events in your future.

[Mark]

Thank you, the poem was just an idea more than it was any sort of lament on my part, but I'm glad you liked it. :)

[dw817]

I've been noticing this from poets. I read something and if it's sad I immediately annotate that the writer is depressed. Not so all the time.

With me, what I write in my poems though usually and most often does show a reflection of myself.

[Mark]

It used to be that my poems were reflections of what I'm feeling but lately I've been feeling mostly centered, balanced so I write when an idea comes to me.

[dw817]

That's good you can do that. I'm a bit like Tinkerbell. I can only hold one emotion in my head at a time and my writing does tend to reflect that particular mood. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Borrowed time....isn't that what we all exist upon? As we age, we realize we may never have "the ocean" but "the pond" well, it can be ours and we have to take every sip we can. Regrets can haunt a person, but unfortunately there is no rewind button in life. We have to move forward making whatever changes we can to make our lives more worthwhile. Very well written...lots of introspection here. Lydi**

[Mark]

Thank you for reading Lydi :)

[Blue]

Mark, you are amazing when it comes to painting imageries.

[Mark]

Thank you Arzel. :)

[Devesh]

I loved the first line..."I pour a cup of borrowed time into the hour glass." Imagery at its best. Thanks for sharing :)

[Mark]

You are welcome. Thanks for reading

[Devesh]

My pleasure =)

[TL Boehm]

I so want a do over. I feel this poem in my core.

[Mark]

If I could I'd give you one.

[Baby Ricochet]

We're supposed to be brash and arrogant when we're young. That's how we learn humility.

[Mark]

I dunno I'm a Martian I guess. I started out being quiet and hard to know. I had to teach myself to be brash. Lol

[LadyAnn68]

I feel the same way too! If only we could get a second chance. Good write.

[Mark]

Thank you again, glad you can relate. :)