A Wish for Rain

Feeling bad doesn't last. The air might feel dirty, but the rain will wash it clean.

There is trouble in my road.

Been there so long, so old.

This monkey back aches in pain,

Oh how I wish it would rain.

To think, I thought I was whole,

no need, for another's soul,

Wanting laughter for these ears.

Now I need rain, not these tears.

I'm just tired to the bone,

always feeling I'm alone.

My coldness lies deep inside

where thoughts and feelings collide.

Faded memory I search.

Hungry, Pain sits on his perch

laughing when I fail to find,

any memory that's kind.

You can not go home again,

but would it be such a sin

to lay down this heavy chain?

Oh, how I wish it would rain.

I pack up my darkened soul,

wondering, can I be whole?

Trouble in my dusty road

stares, like an uncaring toad.

Dusty and parched, my soul can

still live in this blasted land.

half and aching, but still sane;

oh, how I wish it would rain.

Cover me in cotton clouds,

under this weight I am bowed.

Lift it and remove the stain,

Oh, 

how I wish,

it would rain.

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

"There is trouble in my road.
Been there so long, so old.
This monkey back aches in pain,
Oh how I wish it would rain." This first stanza hooked me right away. I like your use of "my" road when I was expecting "the" road. Oh, the power of one little word well placed! Also, for me, the "monkey back" which calls up the old "monkey on my back" is well played here and unique.
"Wanting laughter for these ears.
Now I need rain, not these tears." love this, too

Your ending is very good...in other words a well worth the read poem IMHO

[Pax]

wow....
this is such an amazing piece
the lonely toad in the picture adds up to the loneliness of the poem itself.
wonderful work...

[Blue Ivory]

I love how you ended it! It's a very interesting ad eye-catching poem you have here. It has humor instead of emoness. Good job!

[fjgale]

Painful and real. Nicely done.

[T. Michele Smock]

funny peom

[Coyote Poetry]

Rain can clean up some messes. Some take time and patience. I like the flow of thoughts and the strong ending. A very good photo also. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[SilentNiaAngel]

It's beautiful...even thou i was disgust with the frog at the top... i don't like them. But the poem was wonderful and it flows well & well written

[Kiari Sabon]

it flows nicely and its beautiful. the feeling of being incomplete is shown very well and this pain is understood

[Mockingbird]

brings to mind someone who's been on their own on the road for a very long time and is now weary. he's just looking to rest and be comforted. perhaps he is looking for absolution from what he might have done in the past. open to many questions and very lyrical as well. excellent poem.