Mortal Coil

Another one from my book

MORTAL COIL

I am sick and tired of this endless mortal coil. 
This travesty we call humanity and it's merry-go-rounds of civility, 
False loves and anxieties, 
Nothing to show for our efforts but suicidal tendencies and emotional rape.

 

Why do you try?
Tender hearted lover.
Sweet faced little girl trapped in the body of a w***e,

Selling black and whites for praise and encouragements,
The only way to feel beautiful in a world of sickening grays.

 

Mark up your body with ink,
Fake wings.
Symbols of power that give you nothing but psychological fortitude

That fades away when the next one comes around.

 

She'll f**k with your head.
Play with the heart you keep on your sleeve.
Make you fall in love with her than drop you off in the middle of the ocean.

All alone and watch you drown.

Reviews

[Bubo]

Stunning writing, why do we try indeed, when there is so much disappointment and hurt, so much lack of compassion in our world, that glorifies so much waste.
Brilliant writing, and a great depth.

I am sick and tired of this endless mortal coil.
This travesty we call humanity and it's merry-go-rounds of civility,
False loves and anxieties,
Nothing to show for our efforts but suicidal tendencies and emotional rape.

[Alicia_Skye]

Definitely your darkest, definitely my most favourite then.
I love the last stanza, like all your work it starts off strong, is strong through it then finishes on a strong too, leaving the reader wanting more :)

"Make you fall in love with her than drop you off in the middle of the ocean.
All alone and watch you drown."

Bravo!

[Aven]

there is much ground for this brutal poem... so many things are wrong with our society. very well written!

[GTVile]

Hahaha, the first line in this thing is the truest thing I've ever read. Good job.

[Dream Weaver]

Unbelievably dark and dreary.
I really enjoyed it....

[the in between]

Intense... I loved all of it you explained everything well and ended it stronger then the last paragraph. everything intensifies more :)