Hurting

Alone with no place to go
Forgot the memories i once cherish so
Some say to move on day by day
That's easy for them to say
They aren't the one whose crying in the dark
Feeling like I'm bleeding in a tank full of sharks
So now I have to live
With nothing left to give
Because my heart went to the one
Guess I didn't consider that he might be done
Now, each time I breath in and out
I'm stuck wondering what life is really about.

Reviews

[George Coombs]

Great writing that tells it how it is. Certainly, it's far too easy to say "move on" when you are not the one hurt-Like you, I have often wondered what life is really all about;perhaps the language of potry can, at least, point the sensitively enquiring mind in the right direction. Great work

[Angel]

Thank you so much! I love how thoughtful you were :)

[George Coombs]

Your welcome

[Krista]

Wow. very well written and very strong piece. The past can very easily haunt a person. Its often hard to leave behind I have been through much myself Here if you want to talk.

[Angel]

Thanks I appreciate it :)

[Karmee]

Very nicely written, love the rhyme scheme as well
very poetic.

[Angel]

Thank you, I appreciate your feedback :)

[Karmee]

no problem

[Wordsmith]

Amazingly worded
Well written
Extremely poetic
So relatable
Obviously sad but certainly a joy to read
Masterpiece
Example of what a short poem should look like

[Angel]

Thank you so much :D

[Teddybearlee]

It's a beautiful love/hurt reading poems like this. I'm glad you have found an outlet and I hope it brings you a little bit of relief, I know for me, it's been iffy, sometimes I'm proud of my work and that gives me a brief moment of peace, other times, I just sigh and say what's the point. I hope you keep writing because I do enjoy seeing your writings and the way you express yourself, I continue to see a little bit of similarities in the way we express ourselves and our questions...obviously many people go through the same questions and comments we deal with, the "advice" of others on how to handle situations, and it's nice not to feel so alone in my inability to comprehend their suggestions when I see others question it as well, or say "it's easy for them to say". Sorry for being wordy, just been quite a day here, and reading this struck a chord :)

[Angel]

Hey don't worry about it I like knowing what people think. Thank you for your kind words :)

[Hbrook]

I can relate. I wish heartbteak would just go away... Btw I hope you feel better ans can move on. Goodluck
Ps I liked the lines
5 and 6
I think it described the feeling rather realistically, and was very creative

[Angel]

Well, im glad you liked it. Thank you.