Black Velvet

Tired of countless headcounts,

Even the sheep abandon me,

My pillowcase, a Pandora ’s Box,

Spews out faces once forgotten,

The wind hushes by, as if to caress,

But merely resonates in this void,

As the night flows like black velvet,

I gradually drown, in its cold embrace...

Reviews

[ANTO]

The first stanza was such a mind-tingler that I kept going back to it with more of my mental post-it notes with 'WOW!" scrawled on them.
You conveyed our dark "friend" so well here Annie - depression is a son-of-a-b***h.
Well penned my friend.
God Bless
:))

[Isabel25]

Yes Anto, I actually came up with this piece as the first couplet kept ringing in my head...I always get fixated about some image like that and then create something around it. So glad you liked it :)

[andrew mitchell]

How tireless the mind works, even the sheep give up! A lovely write!

[jeannemarie coulter]

well written...when the sheep abandon me and the night breezes begin to resonate i get up and help myself to a glass filled with milk and a healthy shot of homemade amaretto...it usually works...

[Isabel25]

Too bad I dnt have some with me. I dont know if its even available where I live as I have never come across amaretto or heard of it until you told me about it. Always happy to see you comment JC :)

[sinNsincerity]

the infinite and countless open files in our minds that deprives us from sleep.
Great write Annie!

[Isabel25]

Thank you so much David :)

[~]

A very inventive and descriptive way of talking about thoughts running wild and leaving the speaker void of their full full of a night rest. A great sensory detail that velvety feeling. :)

[Isabel25]

OOh...new picture! good one Moon :D And thank you for stopping by..always happy to see you here :D

[Korin]

Wow, four stanzas that burst with self expression and creativity. Worth the read indeed.

[Isabel25]

Wow.Thank you so much for stopping by and taking the time to review this Korin...I was just having a sleepless night....

[TheLostMind]

"My pillowcase, a Pandora ’s Box,
Spews out faces once forgotten,". Well in my case I see the same face.. and my mind just refuses to put something else in there. Fantastic choice of words..

I am both awed and confused looking at the third stanza. I see it as a ray of light, hope .. You think something would come and fix this.. Something which has all the answers.. You meet it only to find that it doesn't have what you are looking for.

I loved the exquisite wordplay here. Good write :)

[Isabel25]

Heyy LM..long time! And your interpretation of the third couplet is spot on. That's exactly what i wanted to portray through those two lines...And yes, a particular face comes into my head more often than the other faces do..so i guess we are in the same boat :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really tough when those memories keep haunting us, every time we close our eyes to rest, and then get no peace at all.

[Isabel25]

Yes...exactly :) Thanks Jacob

[Simon Welsh]

I love the resigned feel. Those last two lines hit home.

[Isabel25]

Thank you Elliott :)

[Misery]

Words of a resigned and gentle sorrow, yet I smile, because it feels great to read your writing once again.
Long has been the wait to wander through the words of Isabel. Eloquently crafted, dear Annie.

[Isabel25]

You always are too nice to me Misery. But thank you for those lovely words. Always happy to hear from you :)

[Misery]

You are always welcome. I do adore your poetry.