Distance

Wrote this a few years ago

Come closer to me
Find my energy
I wait for you
Feel my thoughts
They call to you
I'm alone without you
I feel you near
Your voice I hear
I have always waited
For the moment
My thoughts drift to you
Even as I sleep
I am alone with you

Reviews

[J.]

D.R., may I ask what you believe the intended idea originally was?

[D.R. Wilsey Jr.]

This just sounds very redundant which detracts greatly from your idea. Since you said it was written a few years ago, I'll assume you've grown in your writing and wont comment too much on this piece.