Poverty

Poverty is an exhausting concept

a way of living

an end that never comes

a weigh over the sidewalk feeding disdain 

is losing what you were, but must definitely what you could be

blinking loose

    day over day

it happens then

that faith starts leaking

Author's Note

first post, let see how it goes

Reviews

[ARLorenz]

I like this poem quite a lot.

Again, a couple things that seem like they might be typos? (so hard to tell with poetry)

I like the concept behind this piece. And I like that you use fewer words to express yourself. I think the feeling comes over stronger

[A.W. Carl]

I wanted to like this piece and connect with it, I just couldn't. It has some really nice elements and words to work with though. It left me feeling like it was so close to being really powerful and insightful. I think if you make some additions/changes this could be a really solid, cohesive piece.

Thanks for sharing

[J.Arthur.B]

I think you are right, I also felt It needs something else, but I can't find that right now. although I still feel is a strong text, with a subject hard to poem about. thanks for reviewing sincerely

[Stan Lee]

You're so right. Exhausting. This is a very insightful piece of writing. Well done and thanks for sharing :)

[J.Arthur.B]

glad you liked, really glad indeed