The Stolen Heart

My heart was stolen in a moment,

with the flutter of her eyes.

 

Her laughter bubbles with ease.

like an antigua fountain.

 

I bring her gifts and trinkets,

just to see her smile.

 

My whole world is engulfed by her,

how could I love anything else?

 

Today she is taking her leave,

for she has found another.

 

Tomorrow she will have a new name,

but I, I will still call her daughter.

 

Reviews

[Mark Pearce]

As I was reading it I thought "Could this be about a baby?" A wonderful payoff here.

I don't know what an antigua fountain is, but it flows wonderfully off the tongue so a great decision.

Simply told, leading the reader toward truth...and we are rewarded. Your emotions wonderfully conveyed.

[Melody P-]

I will say again..beautiful**
most definitely;)
This makes me think of my girls and that "someday"
I loved the ending..the conclusion of a "new name" and the still calling her your daughter..
that is so meaningful**
Great Write!!

[rumpulpulsky]

I liked the surprise element. Soon I'll be there with mine.

[C]

This is another beautiful work. You are very talented. At first, I didn't really get it (which I now know is supposed to be the point), but that last line made this another great poem.

You might be happy to know that you are my favorite poem that I've found on this site : ).

[Owlecks]

Nice surprise at the end for me. I thought you were talking about a girlfriend.

lol I was wondering why you were talking about a girl. :P


Hi, I'm alex :

Chills. I am not at that point yet with mine, but it will be such a bittersweet battle within to let her go.
I have a lump in my throat just thinking about it. Thanks!

[Jeff]

This was absolutley beautiful! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.

Just a few things:
2nd Stanza: "a[n] antigua fountain"
3rd Stanza: "I bring her gift[s] and trinkets,"
4th Stanza: "how could I love anything else[?]"

I'm going to show this to my brother and sister-in-law, they just had a little girl and I'm sure they'll love it just as much as I did. Very "I Loved Her First".

Very well done, thanks for sharing!