The bête noir of life.

A spark of darkness, burst into the light.
A whisper in the monstrous quiet.
My beautiful child is holding me and won't let go.
Daddy, I cleaned up the mess I made. Don't be angry.

Summertime fog in the sinking heat,
drowning in the open air, obscuring vision.
Echoes of ancient bellows, a tiny roar.
Daddy, it's me, your boy. See what I made at school?

Siren call from beyond the noose, calling, cajoling, beckoning me.
Sweet pain of dreamtime songs and truncated childhood.
Daddy, I love you, I won't let you go.
Daddy, why are your eyes leaking?

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

As soon as I got the RR I had to read this. And I`m glad I did.
A tremendous write, a Plathian balance of inner emotion and external symbolic, packed in four perfectly balanced quatrains that make it even more poignant. Jeremy is a tremendous poet, an excellent write

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you Leslie, I'm really flattered and glad you enjoyed it. This one was unusually personal for me; it's nice that you always 'get' what I write.

[Rene Velez]

I enjoyed this, emotive and visual, well done.

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you Rene :)

[SANDEEP SHETTY]

its a very good reflection of the latent emotions....i thoroughly enjoyed it...

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a profound insight to things that aren't pleasant in life. The lost of parent naturally or in a freak accident can be traumatic but from suicide can be even more shocking and traumatizing. The mind of someone who is depressed is one that many can't understand unless they have felt it. This poem makes you read each line and analyze it. The poem as a whole is one that is emotional and makes you think.

[An owl on the moon]

What dark creatures haunt our worlds... our minds... devouring the light... and here we are moved over lifetimes... sorrows and suffering... So much pain...

[Shaquana Adams]

I love the reflection here. It's so beautifully moving. Great work Jeremy! :)

[Ruth]

You always voiced in such a potent manner...emotively so. The reflection here and the contrast of inner and outer is striking, truly wonderful hon x

[Jeremy Baker]

Thanks for the kind words, Poppy, much appreciated!

[Ruth]

My pleasure hon x

[Frieda P]

Such an intriguing title, reading this reminds me of Harry Chapin's Cat's in the Cradle. Outstanding!

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you for your lovely review!

[Frieda P]

You're welcome Jeremy, muchy enjoy'd!