Tears of Words Untold

I promise you

she tried her best to dry her eyes that were soaked in tears

She tried as hard to make them stop from pouring down her cheeks

She tried to stop her tears from wetting the pages she wrote

She tried to write happy stories and thought happy thoughts

She tried anticipating a happy future that may or may not awaits her

But yet

She still couldn't help BUT cry whenever the night comes

Can you hear it?

Can you hear her sobbing in the nights when the whole world is a sleep in peace?

She writes the saddest of the most saddest stories she had ever written

But all she ever wrote could not compare to how her heart is breaking 

And i promise you!

She tried her best to rewrite this story

A story of a broken girl

Her story

But her tears had already smudged and made a mess of her words

Words never spoken

Never read

Clouding her visions

Ruining her hopes.

Reviews

[Black Jess]

That was Touching ! I really loved the idea of how hard she tried to write a happy story and then it turned out to be sad and she just can't help it ! That was Beautifully written ^^

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you for you're review and yeah some people are just filled so much sorrow that they cant even fake a smile or even save their happy thoughts from the dark clouds of sadness that are barricading them.

Thanks again Jess, I appreciate your comment :)

[Black Jess]

You're welcome . But you see , I believe in one thing, it all depends on us, we CAN FIND HAPPINESS if we are ready to let go the awe and sadness and if we are ready to get out of our comfort and yet sad zone , because it's hard to create happiness by ourselves. that's why most of us stay under the cloud of sadness that's covering us from the light of the sun and from which we are afraid to be blinded for we were sitting in the darkness way too long . That was my personal thought after all =)

[Joey Nizz]

I agree with you, it all depends on the person if he or she really wanna get out of their slump of sorrow and live a normal happy life, its your life and your actions, act right to avoid the negativity.

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was moving and I can see your passion for writing. The way you make the reader feel as if they are that girl. I promise I'm trying so hard to be happy.... It's just...
Slipping... fleeting. I'm so close but..

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks :)
That's what i'm trying to do i want to make the reader feel the story ad if their in it.
Thanks again for your review.

[ReedWrite]

Very moving...you make the reader feel the angst and pain. Nicely done.

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you very much, I always try to make the readers feel the story behind the words written, so thank you :)

[APOORVA]

amazing job.
what a feel.
thrilling and admirable.
loved it

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you Apoorva :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You left me speechless. I loved the way you have written about a girl so very well. Every line you have written about her pain and her tears is very correct. Yes, she feels the same way you have described. I am amazed at your thought about this which is very true. Loved it. Well done.

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you very much
i thought really hard and focused on this one and you can re read it again if you'd like because i found some mistakes that i have found.
But thanks again i appreciate it :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. I truly liked it even more because a boy have written such great feelings of a girl which are really true. It seems that you are a keen observer and a true person to understand a girl's emotions.

[Joey Nizz]

I like to observe, understand and relate, to truly understand what a person, boy or girl is going through, i'm already a boy so i would know of most of the things boys go through, but to understand a girl you always have to be there for her.

[Najam Us Saher]

Yeah. It's true. I like that you are so concerned. :)

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you very much, i always try my best to be ^^