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I'm stepping with my demons

I'm dangling by its end

Dark roaring mist darkens into a fog surrounding me

back and forth circling me

Head bursting of illusions and delusions

Wanna shake from this dream and arise awake right now

They keep telling me its alright

but I wanna be forgiven on this night

And yet

No one around can rescue and protect me now

Hanging on a beacon

Tryna chase away the darkness insida me

Cause no one can rescue nor protect me now

Peered inside of this false semblance

Awaiting answers that'll never come

I have embraced the wrong solution

But no one around have proven me wrong

Been seeking and searching out there somewhere

For what is lost and absent here (I just wanna shake and arise from this dream)

Reviews

[Black Jess]

Very deep and concerning, it shows a big deal of troubles, illusion and insecurity, yet such beautiful in its dark way !
Good Job ~

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks Jess, i'm glad that you think so :)

[Ethan]

Pretty good job, I'd be careful of redundancy (eg. dark roaring mist darkens), but other than that, it's nice.

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you, ill keep it on mind next time i write something like this

[angel]

If this is serious, message me. I can help you.
If not, great job writing, because you make me believe you, and fear for your soul.

[Joey Nizz]

Its just another piece that Ive wrote long back, thought of bringing out of the closet.
But thank you for your concern and thoughts about this.

[angel]

You're very welcome, dear one!

[Najam Us Saher]

It is very rare that I get to read something dark from you, I hope you are fine. Take care.

[Joey Nizz]

Hey Najam,
Im fine its just another piece that Ive wrote back then. Thank you for your concern though ^^

[Najam Us Saher]

You are always welcome.