Loneliness, A Nonet

 

Loneliness – A Nonet

 

Outside his window in the sunshine

A passing world is there to see;

But he’s within and sadly,

That world is not for him.

Craving company,

So much to say,

he sits there,

Alone,

Sad.

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Great poem. What the heck is a nonet? Doesn't sound like something I'd go trout fishing with. lol Its too hot and humid to go outside here but I went anyway wandering the open grassy fields with my little chow dog. We found some passion flowers and I took some of the seed pods to throw in my field. I like passion flowers. I used to eat the seed pods when I was a kid. I was a weird kid. Some things never change eh? This is a sad piece John but good work nonetheless.

[Helena]

Very good nonet! A very worthy addition to my "Loneliness" contest.

Thank you for submitting this lovely poem.

~ Helena ~

[~amanda~]

this is (so far) my favorite poem of yours. i love the structure, the imagery and the language... great work!

[Margaret Barton-Wahl]

This a very interesting poem. It not only clearly describes loneliness, but does it in a manor pleasing to the mind, ear and eye. Nicely done.
Margaret

[Fran Marie]

A well written nonet of nine lines ~ if you added one more line to ten syllables

you would have an inverted ethere~ Nice Job~Fran Marie

[Lily1111]

A wonderful Nonet that paints a picture of loneliness so well.

[emmajoy]

This has such clear form - full of subtlety and flow. Sad though, so sad.. and there are people like that - your nonet speaks for them all.

Your poem shows fine technical skill.

Maybe switch 'is there' to 'there is' - second line?

Thank you very much for sharing and, good luck.

[lauren emily]

This is really good. In just a few words you've said a lot.
Great work,
~Lauren