Bright of Sight, Bright of Mind

For Emma's picture competition - re: the Avatar - if my star has cheated, disqualify her!!

 

 

 

 

A star shines brightly in the heavens;

Just one stands solitary as

others dance melancholy

attendance upon her.

 

Her beauty outshines

The firmament;

She is bright,

so knows

it!

 

John L. Berry    12 November 2008

Author's Note

One or two people have suggested minor alterations to this . One I have used (and/so) but others requiring additions were not as this is a nonet - syllable by line reduction 9 to 1

Reviews

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Yours is a fitting poem for the picture where one star outshines all the others. I liked the shape of your poem (due to the form) and especially the lines, "Just one stands solitary as others dance melancholy attendance upon her." If I'd change anything at all, it would be using "and" instead of "so" in the next to last line. Sharon

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Well written. A lovely poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[angelina neves]

very beautiful!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Starpower. I like the feminine reference/comparison in this, nice.

[Angel Baby]

I 'm in aaaw over this wonderful poem....these few words totally captivated me. So well done. Found it a pleasure to read. Thanks! PW

[emmajoy]

Oh this is lovely.. not cos of the words as such but the thoughts and format.. thank you very much, John.