What Can I do?

What were you thinking?

When you ran away....

Was it something you did?

Were you having a bad day?

How can I help you?

Tell me what to say....

I don’t want to lose you

I want you to stay.

Reviews

[ApocalypticChick]

Nice poem I like that it tells about what someone would feel about how much a person wants another even though one person left. To me it shows a longing for some one and also about regret about how a person let someone slip away.

[Chantel]

Simple and true. Good poem, I like it.

[Angelic Surrender]

Amazing. It's never easy when someone you care about leaves. You portrayed this perfectly. Great work

[Becky Clancy]

Short, sweet to the point is what I like, very nice work (: I certainly enjoyed it

[Archia]

Nice and short. I quite liked the different spacing, it gave it something more. I also enjoyed the story that was in this, and how the last line ended it quite nicely.

[Emerald Seas]

A wonderful short write. I like your short poems that have a clear, direct message!

[Geraldine]

I loved everything. :D ^^

[Vivere ad mihi, mi Deus]

I love the last four lines, the format is really good. Short, but it says a lot. Great write :)

[Missy Moooooo]

Hmm, Nice write. Says a lot.

[S. Michael Long]

nice again! ok, but change "was it something you did" to was it something I did, did you have a bad day.. it changes the context in the flow, and removes abstractions and obfuscations.. makes it what i call. SUPER FLOW.. as readers we get the point the meaning and the delivery, without question! LOVE IT!!!!