I miss you...

I miss your smile,

Haven’t seen it in a while,

I miss your golden hair,

And the things you like to wear.

I wish we had more time,

You’re always on my mind…

I wish you hadn’t left,

It truly was theft,

The way they took you away,

and I miss you every day.

Reviews

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

awwwwwwwwww...

i hope you feel better soon

[The Pretender]

aww

[Krista Weiss]

Really cute! :)

[Blue Ivory]

sweet =)

[SlightlyOdd]

Sweet and simple

[Wynn Clara]

Amazing work. Truly Talented.

[Alex Crow]

AWSOME!!! Your took the emotions of a break-up and put them into words. Great work

[khalid]

great work..

[Nautili]

i like this and think the rhyme scheme of aa,bb throughout, is what gives it it's rhythym. It reminded me of my first friend when I was very small, she moved away when I was five and she was six, just a few blocks away really, but to me it seemed miles and miles because she was just a few houses down the street, and suddenly, she was gone and I rarely saw her! It was devestating to me, my first true loss, and I remember being so sad. I had forgotten all about that buried memory, and this brought it flooding back!

[ShaneBerry]

i like this, i can identify with it very well, i moved from Denton Texas to fort worth Texas away from all of my friends. and rarely get to see them. this is very touching though the rhyme scheme is unoriginal, but the poem itself is very very nice and i am sure many people can and will identify with it.

thank you very much for sharing.
-S.B.-


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