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Ah, love...what can you do?

 

I was falling

Falling through the sky

But you caught me

When I couldn’t fly

 

Help

Is what you gave

Unconditionally, until you realized

It wasn’t me you wanted to save

 

Kindness

Was all I ever saw

Until I lost the dizziness

From my never-ending fall

 

Trust

Is what I thought I could feel

Until I was proven wrong

And saw that it wasn't real

 

Lies

Are my greatest fears

That you handed over

With pain that sears

 

Honesty

You seem to hate

Where I love

Combining to seal our fate

 

Love

I thought before I spoke

But you tossed it around

And like glass my heart broke

 

You

My loss and my gain

That pride and regret

Led to happiness and pain

 

Me

I held on to you

And when you kicked me off

 I let go and flew

Author's Note

As you can surely guess, this is about a relationship that ended badly - but where I ended up coming out all the better for it. Writing this poem, it's like it's all out of me now, all the bad feelings aren't sitting in me. Oh yeah, and I can't think of a title.

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Falling, huh? Nice metaphor... I think your title should be "Falling". It's simple... right?

This seems like a nice and simple poem. Well, the whole thing with "falling" adds some complexity to it. Regardless, this is a very understandable piece. You seem really good with being able to write stuff that people can relate to. Great job!

Eternally Yours, Blade and Blood

[Kait]

This is....I really connected to it. I've been there. Some of my poems are similar, but I rank yours above mine. That is a GREAT very powerful poem.

[Alexander Fox]

Claire should be the title. Sometimes your all encompassing universal themed poems seem....shallower then they could be. Get selfish. Start writing a bit for yourself, and not 2 explain your thoughts. Just to trap them, beat them senseless and feel accomplished over them. That metaphor may be a little to testosterone fueled for you to understand it the way i meant, but lets just say that i want to see something fall from your brain that i cant even begin to apply to an experience of mine. Just try it once and post it, and I will be satisfied. All of that is not to say this is a bad poem, it is actually very exceptional, but I know you could have gotten deeper, more personal, more raw. Try it.

[Anna]

It's so beautiful in a painful way! Great metaphors!