She Cracked His Skull

Not an autobiography (foul language and adult themes)

She was chasing him around the bed
swinging a hammer at his poor head.
He tried to figure what he'd done wrong
Trying to share his wandering dong.
I guess that maybe he should have asked
But he figured she say no and kick his a*s.
It looks like all his suspicions were right,
I don't think he's going to win this fight.
The first blow just cracked his skull
Now his head's an empty hull.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I haven't had too many encounters such as this, so I'm stretching to imagine what brought this on?!?!?! Your poem seems to suggest the impetus, but I must be missing it. Maybe "sharing his wandering dong" is code language for cheating . . . if so, brilliant word crafting. Sometimes it's nice to just let it all hang out & paint an outrageous word picture as you've done here (quite a departure for you, I'm thinking). This is the second poem I've read this morning where heads are bashed in . . . it must be trending. I'm glad to hear this isn't autobiographical! *smile* (((HUGS)))

[James]

Thankfully I haven't had any encounters like this either. It really just came out of nowhere for no particular reason.

[Shabeeh Haider]

This brought a smile. I am glad you mentioned that this in not an autobiography or it would be pretty worrying.

[James]

Glad it gave you a smile, I needed a quick laugh and this came out.

[V]

A somewhat entertaining story but you're right about the language and even rhythm (for you included rhymes), could read better/smoother. But it made me smile a little for I think this is a rather ironic one. Though your last line reads pretty metaphorical in a way. The title is what drew me in and made me read the whole poem.

[James]

It's not what I generally write, I'm generally a little more serious but today I needed to laugh. Thanks for reading.

[V]

I know yet it's healthy to break your own kind of rules/conventions at times. You're welcome.

[Woody]

haha what's good about this one is that the reader can't help picturing the scene while reading this funny poem. if you could see the scene that's playing in my head right now!! on a loop :)

good one my friend. my kind of poetry as you can imagine :)

[James]

I thought you would appreciate it.

[iamshadowine]

this is really good! loved the poem!
keep writing :D

[James]

Thanks, I don't usually write things like this, but this morning I needed to laugh. Thanks for reading.