Should've been our end

Our first fight

Should've been our end

The first time you made me cry

Should've been our end

The first time you cheated

Should've been our end

The first time you said you loved me

Should've been our end

I deserved better

I didn't deserve any of your bullshit

The first time you said hello

Should've been our end

Reviews

[chloe cruz]

God, I've been in this situation so many times... 'specially with Michael. We were together for a year, and that first time he said hello should've been the day I went away. But damn that just couldn't happen. He cheated six times before I saw through his disguise (not meaning to rhyme...). Anyway, I can really connect to this. Also, it's got an excellent flow... written really well. Thanks for your review, again! XD

Chloe.

[John Stussy]

Wow, this one has a nice bite to it. Sometimes the only way to learn is the hard way, and it's gotta be learned many times occasionally. Well done on this one.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Princess JaniK,

Again, nicely done. The refrain knits the piece together. It's the 20-20 hindsight that always is so unforgiving of our mistakes.

Best regards,

Rick

[Fredrick Malkyor]

Love always has it's ups and it's down's, but for this it's at rock bottom for love I see. I enjoyed the read.

[W. Michael Anthony]

Your composition gels well with your content. The idea in your piece is as old as relationships and especially true for young women. Keep writing.

[BULLET FOR MY VALENTINE]

Hello love i really enjoyed reading this and wanted to thank you for your touching messages your talent for writing is awesome i want to mend the pieces of your broken heart.let the tour begin

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you deserve better...i like the way you wrote it...great write..

[Legion]

Hindsight is the hardest perception that we can look upon. Good write.