Turn To Go

About 6 months ago this actually happened......

Half past midnight

And I'm still sitting on your windowsill

You won't tell me to go

You don't want to say good night

Your girlfriend calls and you send her to voicemail

I look at you shocked

What the f**k are you doing?

You take my hand, trace my scars on my arm

I shiver

Not from being cold, but from your touch

I shiver again when you run your fingers through my hair

And again when you touch my cheek

I look into your beautiful brown eyes

And wish I didn't have to go

I pull my hand from your's

And turn to go

Reviews

[Just Plain Me]

Once again, you describe how you felt amazingly well. Great job Chickie

[black_rose_obsession]

I really liked the whole flow of this you did really good. Again good work. I can actually relate to this, something similar to this happened to me too. But really this is described in such detail, I feel like I could see every movement and detail a moonlit night and a boy and a girl is practiacally the recipe for loves magic. Good write, you do an amazing job at describing things that have happened to you I really love this piece of work. Keep up the good work!
Love,
Ren

[Jemma]

It all flowed really well except for the last few lines. It was a good poem though. Well placed and tells a story. Nice work

[Last Lying Look]

I like this. I picture the moon shining an amazing light on the scene.
Really great write. It provoked some strange feeling I haven't felt in a while.
Amazing work!
-Elissa :)

Sad. And very catchy, as your writing always is.
It might be about not giving into your desires, because no matter how much you want it, it might not be right.

[poemsforlife]

really nice piece I really liked how you described the whole moment with such detail
very nice

[DearWorld]

this is a beautiful piece. I was really drawn into the moment. great job. XD

[PaperHearts]

Very nice! I liked the spooky kind of atmosphere that you created in this piece, and through it, could really feel the intensity of the moment. You tackled the issues of pain, love, reluctancy, and morality really well in this piece, and I liked the way these problems were resolved at the end of your poem. Nice imagery too.
Great poem!
~PaperHearts