Surface

Head under water,

I can no longer breath.

Choking and struggling,

I try reaching the surface.

 

Under and under I go,

Away from humanity and my broken soul.

My lungs fill with water,

As I struggle to reach the surface.

 

Water as cold as ice,

Pricking at my skin till it's numb.

My screams are muffled by water all around,

My world is lost as I fall from the surface.

 

With my eyes squeezed shut,

I try one more time to break the surface.

My body is numb from lack of oxygen,

And I feel myself dying a little more inside.

 

I will myself to fight,

To make it out of this alive.

I reach out and you grasp my hand,

Pulling me, helping me fight to reach the surface.

Reviews

You feel hopeless, overwhelmed, so sick, and then you're pretty sure that you're going to drown. but then unexpectedly, a hand comes out of nowhere, a someone who wants to help it.
the question is whether you'll accept it or not. it's not so simple, though.

nice write.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i like this very much its amazing...... good work , beautiful

[chloe cruz]

I really loved this. It was deep, depressing than towards the end, that changes and you see light in it, help, happiness. Really beautiful.

Chloe.

[~amanda~]

full of beautiful and startling images. very cool to read! thanks for posting.