Beyond

Beyond the great beyond.

Beyond this mortal coil.

Is there a life that waits for me?

Is there sweet relief?

Shall I embrace the darkness?

Or shall I walk towards the light?

Give me strength to make it through another lonely night.

-Jaspar

Reviews

[Adarsha Chatterjee]

Liked it. It is a short and a good one. A small mistake you made on the third line. There I think the word 'the' should be omitted. Otherwise everything seems okay. Fourth to eighth line should have question marks. Very well written

[Jaspar]

Thanks for the feedback. I made the changes you suggested. Much better, Thanks.

[Adarsha Chatterjee]

you are welcome