You in my world

As I remain all that exists of me
I am my own universe
As I represent myself as my own nation
Lord Kitchener shows no hesitation as to say I need you

I need you
I need you to fulfill my desire
which rivals my basic need for air to breathe
I do not know how
But you've managed to become the spiraling centre of my universe
Like gravity
Compelling my weep, my glee and everything infatuated with everything I want even if it's not what I need

Tears trickling down my cheek
Being brought to tears just by the image of you projected to my mind
Without any doubt of your majesty

I'm oblivious
I've been rendered speechless
But that is a comic price to pay
If it allows you to fall into my arms

Reviews

[Melati]

This was very emotional, as well romanticI. I love it very much. Keep writing!

[SwagMaster]

This was very touching and emotional, and expressed the feeling of total and complete desire very well. I enjoyed it immensely and look forward to more of your work.
And on my poem, I meant no political message (I don't even really know what politics are yet), and so I hope you were not offended in any way.:)

[Star Wolf]

Your words are very romantic with a powerful emotional impact. Great writing!

[Cassie Fraga]

kept me wrapped up from the start!! your word play is AWESOME!! great write!!
**tips my lyrical wand to you**

[SheaRyhai]

Absolutely stunning vocabulary and images put to great use here. You make the writer seem so strong and majestic, yet show their vulnerability in love along for another.

"but that's a comic price to pay, if it allows you to fall into my arms." - this line, loved it! That is what love should be to me - but these days love is so shallow and based on even shallower needs. Brilliant write!

[Raja]

I get a philosophic touch weaved in love through this poem.

"I need you, I need you to forfill my desire which rivals my
basic need for air to breathe."

I like this portion very much!

Thanks,

R

[absolutefolie]

I can relate to this entirely. Lovely poem!

[Gheeneil]

The first line caught my attention. I liked the thought you wove: strong and deep. It stood out. Hence, etched in memory.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Fabulous!

[dead man talking]

brilliant and desperation full ,me likes