Cursed

Free Write

Duck down low.
F**k on the letters.
A tightly wrapped movement
closing in on
A surface of shelter. flick the embers.
Groan through the pressure.
Photos
a hunching body
white
under
black
spine poking out through the skin on the back.
Like a sky view of rolling
mountains
And naked- an unhooked
necklace of pearls..
Up close
to eyes
blue
 dark.
poignant
 shock.
brightened
with invisible
blood clots
and lights.
It hurts
the belly hurts.

Author's Note

No edits besides this caption right here..

Reviews

[Ed Fagan]

Intriguing. I am drawn to the abruptness of it's form.

[Rob Santana]

Cool a*s free write. Spine poking out through the skin on the back.....That's bad a*s. m/

[Icepoet]

I found your style extremely original, and innovative - as was the subject of your work. Well thought-out, rhythmic as the pulses of pain it deals with, and an almost Robert Lax delivery that guarantees the reader is immersed (and illumed) in, and by, those "blood clots and light".

[Jazmen]

Thank you for the wonderful compliments, I really appreciate them. I'm charmed to hear how deeply you've read into this piece, thank you again

[Domenic Stewart]

Certainly some "interesting" words, but still good.

[Wondering Mind]

You make it as if it's a rape from within..Very effective in pace and phrasing.

[Wolfwind]

Ooh... yes. You certainly have captured discomfort in a clear and to the point way. I thought it's short lines and quick pace enhanced the overall energy of the piece, giving it quite the punch.

Nice!
Aaron