So Close

A poem about a woman who I've had a thing for since we young. She was living in another state and just recently moved back.

10 miles

From the woman I've been dreaming of for years

I'm full of hope and fear

Everything flowing through my mind

Romantic words I'm looking to find

To express how I feel about her

Something sweet and clever

Like her eyes shine like the brightest star

If I could play the guitar

I'd write her the sweetest song

Never do her wrong

Make her my Sun

So my soul will never be frozen

Make her my everything

So when she's leaving, she's beaming

Be everything she'll ever need

So she'll never be worried

I'd ever leave

And she'll believe

That I'll always be hers

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

I loved just reading your note, and then the poem was flooded with anticipation, anxiety, and that wonder of wonders as love draws close to you again! Beautiful and lifting.. May your dreams come true..

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. i don't think "no matter how many times we fall for people ...." is true ... to me that's a notion ... not a tenet ... i think when one is with someone, one is with that someone ... and that is why we get affected badly when that someone lets us down or turns out to be malicious ... anyway ... your words play like a song ... beautifully written ... with earnestness ... and hopeful ... i think it's a great thing that you'll explore your feelings and she hers ... it's amazing to belong to the RIGHT person ... a person who won't betray us ... i'm very inspired, jeff ... am thinking maybe it's time for me to step out too ... and meet someone ...

[MMSzesny]

Hi,
Very sweet, I love the emotion behind it. I'm a sucker for romance.

My only thought; rhyming "her" with "clever". Stretching to force a line to rhyme is distracting from an otherwise nice piece.
Thanks for sharing.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Aaaww...this is extremely darling...I think that no matter how many times we fall for people, there's always that one person we always cared for and always will care for :)