Maybe

Maybe, should I?

Maybe I should give this woman

A tour through my brain

Maybe I should give this woman

A chance to kill the pain

Maybe I should I give this woman

My name

Maybe you could whisper

All your fears in my ear

Maybe we could be a team

To fulfill your dreams

Maybe when you feel pain

I can help you maintain

Love gets so confusing

Life always changing

Three words we say remain

The same

Maybe I should give this woman

A piece of my pain

Maybe I should give this woman

My name

Reviews

[Ruth]

Oooh, nice turn around hon, I like this a lot, sometimes, people are oblivious to others torments!
Great poem
xx

[Tomi]

please give her your name

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Subtlely wise...sometimes you have to expose those wounds to let someone in..to let them see the whole picture..and I bet if you give your name, you won't regret it :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very well written poem with such passion of longing and wanting, but afraid to jump in!

[AlieahRose]

OOO I LIKE THIS...
VERY AWSOME PEICE...
GIVE HER YOUR NAME...!!!...
=]...

[An owl on the moon]

There is a tender inspiration flowing through your lines.. that wonder.. that notion of sharing.. of giving of yourself come what may. This really pulled me into the experience and the thoughts running loose.

[Stef Outsiders]

Wow, i really love this... intense and love does get confusing, too confusing at times! well done jeff!

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Love of the most intense kind makes us want to not only be with one another but also know our loved one so very well that there should be no gap in our understanding..our beings should simply blend...well expressed.

[.]

. ah, sheer magic jeff ... this is a song ... brilliantly titled ... and brilliantly justified ... and the way the phrase "my name" appears is absolutely melodious and beautiful ... the last four lines ... especially are incredible ... they just linger and linger and linger ... and the phrase ... "a piece of my pain" is just sheer genius ...