Room

This just came to me one day while I was cleaning and I never really changed it after it flowed out.

Room
Safe
My Space
I look around and see them
The birds
Freedom wings

As I stepped off the cliff
As I leaped with faith
Believing
That I wouldn't fall
That my wings
That their wings
Would carry me
Safely
To where I am supposed to land

I was caged
And these wings were made
For flying
Not hiding
I need to clear space
For landing
And nesting
For my rebirth
I've been squeezing through
The chrysalis
Breaking though
Painful
Lonely
Strengthening
This soaring and awakening

I am ready for my becoming
For my flights landing
Securely
Home

Author's Note

Any critiques welcome

Reviews

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

E=j cubed....Emancipation equals Jennesis's Joyfully Jubilant. Now that's a positive formula with no remainder of a negative outcome. You have the ability to be a major fabric in the tapestry of poetry.

[Jennesis]

I will always remember you when I read this poem Rico. I felt it was so unfinished and needed so much. When I read it to you, you said "it's done" and read it aloud to me in your own beautiful metered way. It was such a poignant moment for me. Thank you for the powerful message, of trusting my self, my voice. You have had so much new work, I haven't had a chance to catch up. Thank you my dear friend~ Jennesis

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Thanks for the suggestion. This speaks to me right now. Again, well written and well said.

[Jennesis]

Glad you enjoyed FT~

[Clockwork]

Your show us a beautiful transformation in this poem. The speaker in this piece is confined by all her insecurities in the beginning, but she realizes her ability to find freedom. The stanza where she reinvents herself is my favorite, especially the line "This soaring and awakening."

Beautifully done with the message of this piece.

[Jennesis]

Clockwork thank you so much for your kind words. That's my favorite line too!

[Clockwork]

You're welcome!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is painful to carry the hurt that won't allow us to fly...or makes us afraid to fly...

but once we can break those chains and let our wingspan be as far as it can be...we fly to happiness and peace...

not easy but possible..

like your imagery.

[Jennesis]

Thank you Jacob! Appreciate the review. Yes, open the wingspan far!