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Champagne chilling, taking rest
All awaits per your request
Lights are dimmed, lit candles show
Giving off a cozy glow

Music soft to set the stage
Scattered rose petals assuage
Modest table set for two
Overlook a stunning view

All is placed precise, with care
In assurance you'd be there
To unwrap a moment's bliss
And enrapture with one kiss

Reviews

[David Lewis Paget]

Well metred, but does the metre give a sense of the content? It seems harsh in comparison to the softness of the message. I don't like 'assuage' - obviously chosen to rhyme with 'stage' but a little obscure in meaning, and gives the reader pause when it should just flow on.