My Completion

A Sedoka ~Topic— Garden of Love:- Prompt-Poem:From Rumi’s Little Book of Love

‘’Would I think of garden, beloved,
with your face by my side?
Would I long for light, beloved,
when I am lit by the fire of your love?
They say sleep strengthens the mind
but does a lover need a mind?’’
~Rumi's Little Book of Love

My Completion

Orchids shed petals,

carpet path guiding our love;

leads me into devotion.

Wonders of your heart,

sweet nectar cannot compare,
your essence completes my soul.

Author's Note

Sedoka is two 3 lined stanzas put together. Syllable counts 5/7/7 per lines.

Reviews

[Emily B]

i'm an absolute idiot concerning organized structures and forms. But the imagery is nice, soothing, and lovely. Pleased to make your acquaintance.

[Pure Hope]

Thank you, nice to meet you too, before last June I had no idea what form poetry was all about. I am still learning.