Claustrophobia

I am scared, I am lost
Get out of here, I must


But this walls, they just hold
me in
I feel them closing, closing in
on me
I need to escape, I start to
Scream


Larger and larger, grows my
Fear
Soon I know, I'll run out of
Air


I bang and bang, but this walls
Are too tough
Still I bang and bang, then I
Went all rough


But I'm feeling dizzy, I'm
Loosing this battle
From my fingers slipped hope
That I held like a mantle


First my breath hitches, then
My breath stops
I heard it counting down,
My death on the clock


I feel like I've been caught
By a boar constrictor
''It's okay now'' said a voice
''We're out of the elevator''

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I like the way your poem conveys the gut-level sensations thru short phrasing & intense word choices. I am claustrophobic, so I can say you've nailed the feeling! Have you ever had to go into one of those noisy MRI tubes!?!?! *eeeeek!* Back to your poem . . . I like the details you've included, SHOWING instead of TELLING how this experience feels. Good job!

[Archos]

I love this one. The play with perspective is great, I love the twist in the end, where something which seemed so horrible turned out to be such a banal situation.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks, I love happy endings:).

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Claustrophobia....oooh.

Some people just hate confined spaces, don't they?

An intense poem, Jerry.

[Jerryyoung1z]

They sure do

[Dalton Wagoner]

Good job, hope to see more!

[Dead]

This is really good lol

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you very very.