Bitter Sweet Dreams

Poem about a dream I had about my friend who was taken to soon.

Dreaming of you is so bitter sweet
You were the only man to sweep me off my feet
Oh why does life and love have to be so fleeting
When I listen close I swear I still hear your heart beating
Tormented by these dreams so vivid
With your soul gone mine feels so frigid
You hacked my mind, though intricately encrypted
So long I'd waited and was finally committed
I know it's really not you in here
Just a beautiful fabrication, so crystal clear
The rhythm of your voice doesn't sound right
But I don't care, let me hold you tight
The shade of your eyes is a different color blue
As far as I'm concerned it's still you
Your crooked smile is just a tad askew
Though the taste of your lips seems to be true
I wish to sleep forever, never wake
I'm quite tired now, all the smiles so fake
I just want to be with you
Oh why can't these bitter sweet dreams be true

Reviews

[P.J. Amey]

This is very good.
I noticed you keep close watch on the way you form your stanzas and lines,
the rhyming patterns ect. its very well written.
As for the message, love is an all too relate-able one that is sure to find an audience, especially the way you've gone about describing its rough spots.

[Neythan Cardoso]

I almost just cried reading this. This explains my current situation more than anything at the moment. Im just beyond moved by this poem. Im so glad I clicked on this.

[Anna]

I really liked this. You did a wonderful job.

[SheIsMe]

This is very sad and descriptive but lets the reader know that this person will never be truly forgotten and no detail will fade from memory. Well written!

[Jordan Smith]

By far this is my absolute favorite poem I have ever read!!!! This was absolutely masterful. I could really connect with this one and the rhyme scheme was absolutely astonishing. Great Job Jessalynn :D 100 Rating for me!!!!!

[Jessalynn]

Thank you so much. It melts my heart when I get comments like these :) You made my day.

[Jordan Smith]

Your absolutely Welcome :D I'm so glad I could make your day today

[Philip Muls]

You capture the meaning of bitter sweet spot on. A fabrication. Tormented and tired. Torn apart.

Well done.

[Jessalynn]

Thank you so much :)

[Inject Positivity]

Full of feelings.....Such a passionate and melancholic tone at the same time....Well thought out and written with heart....Thank you frnd....THUMBS UP!!!!

[Jessalynn]

I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for reading :)