All The World's A Stage

Emotion Workshop poem for Creative Writing:)

Mechanical

Like the touch of cold, gray metal

It happens when individuality is denied

The sound is reminiscent of a muffled heartbeat

Mechanical

Reviews

[Queen of wands]

This reminds me of what I used to believe the band "Nirvana" was origionally about. I don't know whether people share my opinios about a band being "about" something or whether the songs they write are simple individual pieces of music but I believe the concept applies to many parts of life from a philosophical aspect. Maybe your intention was not for the reader to read too deeply into this,however, this piece accomplishes doing just that in so few words, which is a mark of good writing, in my opinion. This is very Cloak and Dagger. Nice work.

[☮]

I see a parallel with working a 9-5! Short and sweet... as usual. Nice!

[siri]

hmmmmm...industrial...i want more!

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i like how this poem speaks about the lack emotion that the mechanical has. it is a tool, a man-made object that seems so alien for its loss of warmth and mercy. perhaps i am projecting my own meaning but is that not the mission of art? i am an advocate of short poetry and this piece delivers. great job!

[dilettante1890]

Haunting and lovely! Wonderful.