As if you care

Something that I wrote in 10 minutes. Nothing special.

I've been pulled in the currents
And thrashed at the gates
Lured in by the ghosts
And lumped by the rains
Acid droplets
That course down my skull
Searing what's left of
My body that you shunned
I've been racking my soul
Searching for love
Drowning in the blues
Burning in the coals
And all of this
That's destroying me
Has been your share
But oh, baby
As if you care.

Author's Note

Of course, honest criticism.

Reviews

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

A very heartfelt poem, that I'm sure many can relate too.

[Surya pradha]

a poem from the heart. truly enjoyed the way in which you framed each line. definitely no criticism.

[TL Boehm]

So well describes that searing ache we have when we love and the other doesn't Well done.

[Gamitsuki]

FaSCiNaTiNg..........good work......keep going.........good to read......!!:-)

[xDalliance]

Thank you!

[Mayank]

I liked the sarcasm here, in the end the writer leaves grin on the reader. Such pieces always exist in the back of my memory!

[xDalliance]

Oh, thank you. :)

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write. I enjoyed it...:)..................

[xDalliance]

Thank you so much, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome ....:)........

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well hello J.I loved the sarcasm and passion in this piece.Well done my girl :)

[xDalliance]

Hi there, V. I always wait for your reviews ;)
Thank you!

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome girlie :)

[Stonz P.]

Haha, this is a good humorous piece. You write well.
We all have been through this, so not much to offer on the insights.
And I can relate to this since, this is somewhat what every teenager has felt at your age.

[xDalliance]

Ahah yeah, thank you. I'm pretty sure when I look back, I will find my writings very...emo and, well, foolish. Sigh, teenage.

[Stonz P.]

Trust me, you will ;)

[xDalliance]

Trust me, I already know and do xD