The Picture Perfect Cage

Some people get so caught up in economic status that they miss out on some of life's wonderful things

Part of him was screaming,
Just dying to get out.
At first it was her walk, the way she carried herself about.

He watched her from a distance.
Wondering about her life.

He might keep her around
but he'd never make her a wife.

Cause she was never meant for keeps,
And he was bound to throw her away.
Cause she was just some damaged goods.
And that was never gonna change.

But she never shed a tear.
Somehow her heart remained intact.
And if you asked her bout regrets
She'd say "Don't ever look back,
I've always been free
and the world has been my stage.
And I'd rather live and die alone,
Than with a man in a picture perfect cage."

Reviews

[Tomoe Tellez]

I loved this. Reminds me of how I think now. When your words bring memories to people it means they have great power. You've done well.

[J Lee]

thank you. that is exactly we feel about making others feel that emotion. So that is a huge complimant to hear that said about my writing from someone else. Thank you! :)

[hanir]

"And I'd rather live and die alone, Than with a man in a picture perfect cage." I deeply love this part. Very true! Nicely written!

[J Lee]

haha, thank you for reading and taking the time to review. alota women seem to really this ending... I think I smell a bumper sticker ;) thanks again and much love

[hanir]

Hehe.. yeah. You're welcome. keep writing! Would love to read more of your writings.😊

[Madison]

I really liked this. I feel like parts of it explain how I feel in life but yet its not fully explainable.

[sweetsaltywords]

Wow, i love the way this ended. Really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing!

[Antoinette]

Great job. I am so happy to be reading your stuff again. You've obviously have a talent for it.

[J Lee]

Well thank you. Do you know me? Like for reals? You seem to know me pretty well... And what do you mean by "so happy to be reading again" i may be paranoid, or am i just stoned? Hey Green day reference, oops. Im keepin it

[Antoinette]

Sad....he must not see what so many others have a wonderful person with a kind heart and beautiful soul. A oving mother, a devoted daughter and great friend. He's a dummy.....I'm sorry he doesn't deserve you.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

Buenissimo! Flow is EVERYTHING even if the purpose is to disjoint the reader which this was as smooth as drinking water. Well done!

[J Lee]

What do you mean by disjoint exactly? I think I like it. I should probably just look in the definition. But wheres the fun in that eh?

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

its like when your on a rollercoaster and the car is going down when all of a sudden you bank right spinning an a looping sprial that you didnt expect. its a seperation from the constant or i guess joint in our body would mean to dislocate but i was thinking damn dis joint is clean! nah, jk i was making an example that you lead the read through very clearly and I like when that plays. even if the intention was to break the pattern for effect i think you could{ve pulled that off as well but thats a guess outside of this work of course. jazz players use disjointed notes to make us feel like we dont know where the next note is coming fom and i think if thats an allegory for how writes and jazz are alike then I cant wait to get as good as Coltrane.

[J Lee]

Haha, i loved how you explained that.

[PANDORA]

AMEN!!

The ending is my theme in life. To say I loved this is an understatement and this is going in my bookshelf. I would love to read more. You have me hooked. I would love to critique and point out mistakes but I see none.

Thanks for a great read to end my night on.

[J Lee]

Oh my gosh thank you. That was such an awesome compliment. I cant wait to have more for you to read. Why thank you so much for this. A nice thing to end my night to as well

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Beautiful! I love the flow and emotion behind the words! A great poem!!!!

[Braden Freeman]

I actually really liked the ending. I think many of us feel that way: we would rather be free and imperfect, instead of being a slave with a partner who gives us all the riches we could ask for.

[J Lee]

Thank you, I that's what Iwas trying to get acrossed. Wasnt sure how clear i was.thank you for that affirmation. It helps a lot :)