No

She said no

You have to go

You can´t stay

She said no

You have to go

Go away

 

He wouldn´t walk away from her

She said, you’re not the man I thought you were

 

She said no

As he tried to apologize

No, I see the darkness in your eyes

She said no

I should have left long ago

But no

You always made my hope new

It´s gone, the love in me

That I couldn´t see through

 

He wouldn´t walk away from her

She said, you’re not the man I thought you were

 

She said no

I won´t let you lie again

No, if it was love

Tell me when?

She said no

I´ve been blinded

And now it´s to late

She said no

Won´t see love where I know there´s hate

 

He wouldn´t walk away from her

She said, you’re not the man I thought you were

 

He wouldn´t move

He wouldn´t go

So she pushed him away

She said no

But he couldn´t care less

He said yes

The ground hit him from below

She said no

Reviews

[Rahul]

Nice flow of ink, well penned. 100/100.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The repetition of this... I like... the flow is there... You had me from "no"... seems a back and forth... toss and turn of a write... A failing attempt leading to an ending demise...

[Johanna]

I´m glad you liked it :) I acually wasn´t sure about this one, didn´t feel like it was the same standard as I like and see in some of my other work.. but somehow even though falling the words have landed rather nicely. Glad you liked it! :)

[zainul]

When a man lies as a habit to cheat ,the woman should immediately realize and sever relationship.
The case of heartbreak happens if she continues relationship through some tricks.
You have decided well and expressed well in your wonderful poem.
I hope the other girls will learn from your intelligent decision.

[Lydia Shutter]

If one can continue to say no, against all odds, eventually the other party does understand. However, it can be very difficult. Your poem is very different. I liked it. Lydi**

[Johanna]

Thankyou so much Lydi! :) I´m glad you did. Acually I´m really suprised it has allready gotten some reviews and 30 hits! It usually takes days for my poem to get to that number. Thankyou so much for reading it and for leaving a review! :) Means a lot :)

[Sami Khalil]

Saying no sometimes is the only solution but will the other side accept it...A very good poem...:)

[Johanna]

Thankyou :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)