She flew with the wind

Had writers block, so I was looking at random pictures on google and got inspired.. wrote this. Dedicated to Justin.

She made me touch the sun

She made me count each star

When you love someone

You win a battle, but lose the war

She made me find my heart

She made me lose my way

She knew from the start

That she wasn't gonna stay

She made me breathe again

She made my breathing stop

I told her I loved her then

A tender smile was all I got

Bitter cold down my spine

When I saw it in her eyes

She was almost mine

So she said her goodbyes

She flew with the wind

She walked on the skies

Some people stay in your heart

But won´t stay in your life

Reviews

[Jani Jaakko]

i like this one a lot! very evocative and brimming with emotion! Keep up the good work!

[Johanna]

Thankyou :) I´ll try :)

[ScottWinchester]

Sometimes, I think, friends review their friends works to be supportive, whether the work done was quality or not. That support is important (undoubtedly; without the support I've received I'd be three sheets to the wind)... but sometimes you can never be sure if they really, truly liked what you've written.

I really... truly liked this. I read it three times, tasting the word choice, seeing how the rhythm flowed, but mostly listening to the honesty. Not just honesty, though, it goes farther than that... there was wisdom here, too.

Your writing bewitches us; your language is unlike that of any of your contemporaries. You've invested in a common idea -- love and loss -- with a considerable amount of uncommon atmosphere and truth.

This is my favorite of your works so far. Beautifully written; a powerful achievement, its success measured by the strength of its influence of me.

[Johanna]

I agree.. support is important, but you never really can tell for sure when it is support and politeness and when your work is actually enjoyed. But it´s clear that your being honest and mean it here :) and I want to say thank you for your words here, (I only had to look up one^^) Glad I am able to write like this in english, and affect people this way.

Your favorite? :) well then it´is dedicated to you. Thankyou for your support and honesty and I´m just really really happy :)

Ps. check the description.

[ScottWinchester]

lol "Thank you for your support and honesty and I'm just really really happy" hahaha Good, I'm glad :) You're hilarious. You're most kindly welcome; I meant every word. You write effective poetry, plain and simple, and you should be proud of your skill. Even more impressive is the fact that English is not your first language.

And P.S. ... ... you're sweet ;)

[Frieda P]

I think you kicked that writer's block right in the butt Johanna, you pen'd a tale of unrequitted love, I think the title fits your concept here, nicely pen'd.

[Johanna]

Thankyou :)) haha I´m glad :)

[Frieda P]

Welcome, enjoyed! :-)

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Another wonderful write:)

[Johanna]

Thankyou :)

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Welcome Johanna:)

[max_vonnegut]

Well, if I may suggest, I think "She flew with the wind" kind of fits appropriately. Since the narrator apparently didn't get the woman. She flew..away hahah!! Good job by the way.

[Johanna]

I think I´ll pick that, haha thankyou max :)

[max_vonnegut]

Woot woot this makes my day haha! You are welcome.