ocean memories

this is the opening to a book i was working on

As i looked out over the edge of the cliff, the frigid ocean breeze swept stray tears from my face and dashed them mercilessly upon the jagged rocks below. While looking at the ocean, the stars on the water i could almost forget. Forget everything that had happened in the last few days, the images of all the horrific, unforgettable events that had been perminately burned into my memory. Every time i close my eyes i see the faces, i hear the screams its all so vivid, so clear i can hardly see anything else...

Author's Note

I'm sure i have many grammatical errors, you can correct them if you want i don't really care. Feel free to let me know what you think in regards to context and stuff i know its not much to judge but i just wanted to get some of my writing out there.

Reviews

[x]

Excellent..
A simple little concept expanded out into something intriguing. I can see how it was done and are impressed. Simple language (my fave) which allows the reader to go on a journey. I get the feeling the reader is enticed rather than pushed Yes, I get it.

[Can't bring myself to d..]

Interesting opening here. Paints a vivid picture even with such few words. i;d like to here more about whats happening. You said you were working on this, did you stop, then? if you do decide to continue then i would like to read more of this

[Yours Truly]

Wow! This captures the readers interest and really pulls them in. This would make a great intro to a thriller book. I hope you write the rest soon!