Chapter 1

Speeding through the woods with the forest whizzing by was great.Running free with nothing to worry about.Then something changed.As I stopped I was hit by an unfamiliar scent.Not one of the pack.I began to creep in the direction the scent came from.Instead of seeing a predator was a young girl.I was blown away at how beautiful she was.She had milky skin,long black hair,and green eyes.I sat on my haunches gazing upon her in awe.Why would someone so beautiful be in the woods.She turned her head to look at me.She froze,turned away and ran.
No.Don't be afraid of me I wanted to say but what good is that when your a wolf.Walking to where she once was I inhaled her scent.It was ravishing.Flowers mixed with an earthy smell.I loved it.I followed after her.At the edge of the woods was a house.She was long gone.I didn't have a reason to change,now I do.

Reviews

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

well flow of scenes....making it not boring:)

[Dionysios]

Nice tone and very interesting introduction of your storyteller, but I also find it a bit short to make a chapter on its own.
I would suggest adding a more to the description of the girl through the eyes of the wolf. That could be in form of an inner thought, a daydream or any visual interpretation that could tell us a bit more about the feelings of the wolf and could perhaps prelude to the next chapters.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

very good beginning~ I like how you let the wolf tell his tale from a first person point of view~

[Matthews Reggie]

this is cool.. from the viewpoint of a wolf... nice style... but is this chapter too short???