Rising From the Ashes {ACROSTIC}

Rise, rise, to face another day.

I don’t quite see the point in it,

So why bother to rise at all?

I am so sick of being -

Nothing ever goes my way;

God never liked me anyway.

 

From here on the ground,

Rain pouring down from the sky,

Onyx tears streaming down my face,

My life seems so meaningless.

 

Thinking about things to come, I realise

Heartache is all I know, so how can I

Even consider rising from this hole?

 

Again I hear the voices

Saying I should try again,

Hassling me to rise from the ashes.  But

Eternity is a million years away,

So I’ll stay in this hole for just one more day.

 

Copyright©JosieWentzel16July2008

 

Reviews

[Ari]

I always have a hard time maintaining any kind of flow within an acrostic poem. I think you've done a good job of that here.

I would suggest, just as a way to challenge yourself, that you think of titles to go with your acrostics that are not the words that the acrostic spells out. If you state that it is an acrostic poem, people will read the acrostic, so it doesn't necessarily have to be the title, and having it as the title takes a little of the mystery away. You could have titled this piece Phoenix, and it would have added another layer of meaning. I don't know, just a suggestion.

[Josephine Vella.]

This is a wonderfully penned acrostic, and since we share the same name, then even more so hehe, love always Josie xoxo

[Micheal Teal]

"Eternity is a million years away,
So I'll stay in this hole for just one more day."

Great line. This is an excellent poem. As someone who has walked many a dark path in my life I understand these sentiments. Honesty is important in writing and even if the thoughts are unpleasant they need to be expressed. Sometimes acknowledging negative feelings can give comfort for it lets people know they are not alone.

You are a fine writer.

I look forward to the day when you write of happier times.

[An owl on the moon]

Oh, Josie... Your words show such a depth of despair... Such pain that I never want you to carry alone... If I could only show you what life holds... If only...

i love you...

Craig