Souless-mate

When a partner holds things in.

Wet skin

suggesting that you've cried,

closed lips

as you have something to hide,

I wish your trust in me was enough,

but you insist on acting so tough.

 

Red eyes -

you haven't slept in days,

cold looks

as I notice your mind strays,

when we make love you're not there at all,

leaving me feeling so useless and small.

 

I miss

the redness of your cheeks,

I miss

your soft and tender kiss,

never giving up to sadness or fear,

where did your soul disappear?

Reviews

I can relate to this! Very good poem! The whole flow was smooth. I liked the last stanza. It wrapped everything up! Great write!

[Nicholas Hallows]

I really like this poem. The structure is spot on. The breaking up of the first couplet of each stanza has a brilliant effect on the rhythm. The first stanza is my favourite I think. The sad tone of the narrator comes across perfectly. Good work!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

In my current relationship, I can't tell you how many times I've felt this way. Though, it may just be my insecurities talking, I never know for sure. Wonderful write, Yuval. Nicely done.

[Midnight Rose ~*Anna Ro..]

Sad piece, reminds me of a few past relationships. I'm sure anyone who reads this can relate to someone not totally being there and in love with them. Awesome write, Yuval.


~*AnnaRose*~