The Art of Brainwash

Tell me why

when I cry

the tears never seem to dry?

I don't want to feel like I'm the only one.

Closed my mind,

stood behind,

they've led me as if I'm blind -

everything I ever did has been undone.

 

My existence

has always fall on deaf ears.

My resistance,

it slowly disappears.

 

What have I done? What have I done?

Who's that man with the smoking gun?

That's not me. That's not me.

That's not what I really see.

Author's Note

Yes, the rhythm changes 3 times.
Love it or hate it..

Reviews

[Nicholas Hallows]

I like the rhythm changes and the subject matter.
The first stanza is my favourite.
So many of us become brainwashed in so many aspects of our life. Often I think because we are longing for a coonection with someone or something. I certainly believe that's the case with religion and cults.
Making our own mistakes is one thing and inevitable; making someone else's is another.
I think it would be great for all of us if we could take a step back from our lives at some point before we find that smoking gun in our hands.

[Sarah]

Rhyme is always amazing - particularly when it randomly changes, and yet still manages to flow and sound natural. =) I really loved the concept of being completely brainwashed, to the point where you have no will of your own. The last stanza is my favorite and the repetition "that's not me" works really well. Great job! =)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

I like it - a few typos that are easily fixed but a moving piece nonetheless. I can empathize with the feelings expressed. A great mark. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha