Slip Thru This

I can't hold whats in my hand- Avey Tare

Nightingale

Crunch

Flow

There’s a river below.

 

Moonlight

Slippery

Thoughts

In my own head.

 

Helpless

Little

Life

Falling into the river.

 

Identify…….. Something

Chilling……. Deep

Oxygen…… Inside

I like merry mendicants……. Can’t stand all of this

 

Fear

 

Slip thru this

Slip thru mist

Let’s find something

Something here we've missed

 

 

Author's Note

Something I worked on a while back, now revised and edited. Let me know what you think :)
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Reviews

[N/A]

I liked the flow in this,and especially the fourth stanza.
The use of the reply (?) in italics I really liked. Dunno why but it seems to emphasize the almost questioning tone that I felt the first three lines had.But also the decisiveness that the last line endues. Good work !
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[MattWheatus]

I'm a fan of the quirky layout. The space adds to the messages of mist, and slipping through. Good flow too, so an enjoyable read.