The Deep

Skimming through the water like a bird on wing.
Feeling the currents flowing water spilling along my flanks.
Surging into the deep sea searching for sunken ships,
Lost treasures to those above, merely decrepit scenery below.
Perhaps, more, to the sealife that shelters there.

This fantastic ability to relate to earth's final mysteries in the deep
Granted me, through a fluke of nature.  Gills filtering.
Scales protecting, tail and fins propelling forward
To ever deeper realms.

Hardly noticing the increasing pressures
Feeling tides pulling, seeing unfathomed sea creatures.
Appreciating the beauty and the power of the deep sea.
Triton may reside here, only stories to those above.
But the mysterious deepness of this realm begs belief in other gods.

Continuous exploration of this vast world
Only brings me a small portion of its bounty.
Birth, life, death, cycling forever.
Brilliant design of creatures and systems
Only glimpsed from above.
Denied to those who seek to categorize and quantify.

Life is not averages, statistics, and clinical review
Being judged in labs by coated strangers.
Life indeed is deep, resounding, complex in every detail.
Microcosms of universes existing in harmony
Beneath waves brushing the sky.

Oct 11, 2010

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

Shockingly good! I'm kinda pissed; not sure I can write something as good as this.
I thoroughly enjoyed this slick sea-goer, Judy--but begrudgingly.
Why not be a real friend and try some crappy writing for a while?--just to make me look good. Time to spell me, I've been doing it for years.

[Audrey Howitt]

You did such a wonderful job of letting me see the world through the eyes of a fish--deep, thought-provoking work. Thank you!

[Ben Taylor]

"Life indeed is deep"
In this line, you have encapsulated your prolific description of the ocean, and applied it to the phenomenon of life. Very interesting ending message--this may have been unintentional, but it affected me in this way nonetheless.

Also, your descriptions of the deep are exemplary :D

[Judy Ponceby]

No worries Lily, yours is on the way, still working out the ribbits :)

[Lily Mae]

This is beautiful Judy. Even though I was expecting you to write me a personal frog poem.. :) I love the way you have captured the essence and mystery of the deep..

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Ohh, love the last line, it ties this work together beautifully.Deep thoughts, no pun intended. Your vision is captured clearly here, in the most vast realm on the Planet.

Wonderful and delightful!