Ogre Trullet

i know i offed him before, but he's back :) lol

In he came

from the sun one day.

Looking to escape

a fate most grave.

For the fiery orb

high in the sky

would turn him to stone

and he didn't know why.

He'd seen it happen

more than once.

Lost a friend,

the great big dunce.

So though his brain

is the size of a pea

Ogre Trullet hides

out in a tree.

Under cover of shade

most gloomy

He avoids a fate,

a fate so doomy.

His neighbors sneak

on by his tree

as he snores so loud

he shakes them free.

Free of balance,

free of foot.

Free of dignity

Tripping through the roots.

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

Judy, your writing is whimsical and fascinating for sure.

[Samuel Dickens]

I guess the good thing is that, even if they wake him, he won't be able to leave the shade and go after them. Makes me think of "The Hobitt", and Bilbo's captures.

[blakjassy]

I would love to see someone come up with illustrations for this! It is very very cute! I love the neighbours sneaking out after being shaken from their homes by his snoring.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Smiling broadly.
Clever, flows like a singing brook.
Funny lines and great rhyme!

[Brad Nugent]

I can see this as a picture book! As others have said, the last stanza is very good - the repetition of 'free' and then the longer final line work really well together. The only thing I stumbled a bit on was the fourth stanza - the lines 'Ogre Trullet hides out in a tree' didn't seem to flow as well as the rest - that could be just me of course! Apart from that I thought this was fantastic!

[Richielee]

great kids story,another string to your bow : )

[KAREN]

Almost a children's story. It's fun to read and has great flow.
His neighbors sneak
on by his tree
as he snores so loud
he shakes them free.
Favorite part!

[Audrey Howitt]

Lovely work Judy! The last stanza is my favorite actually. Fanciful, but poor little ogre!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Almost brother grimms worthy, A playful side from you that you rarely go into, for one would like to see more of this!