Oblivion

Oblivion - to be washed away by time as if you were nothing.

Ashes and sand,

gray and gold,

intertwined,

latched onto each other,

embraced before the rushing waves,

praying to be spared by their touch.

Reviews

[hanir]

You write creatively! Marvelous!

[JulianaSun]

Thanks ;) So do you :)

J

[hanir]

Nah! I dont think I do. But Im trying.. ☺

[JulianaSun]

Perseverance is what makes a great writer. Trust me :)

[hanir]

Oh is it? Wish you could teach me! ☺ dont have to be great..to be at least acceptable will do. ☺

[JulianaSun]

Yep. Writing comes easy to me, but English doesn´t, considering it´s my second language. So, the best way you can get better at something is by working hard. Ergo, persevere :)
You don´t need anyone to teach you that because you already know it :)
Besides, you are already on the right track - you´re writing.

[hanir]

Im not so confident with my grammar. Hehe

[JulianaSun]

I know what you mean ;)

[hanir]

Yeah it sucks.. lol

[Indra Neil]

a profound and deep brevity! so much said in few words! well done!!

[JulianaSun]

Thank you so much for the review. I rather like writing short poems :)

J

[Indra Neil]

You are most welcome!