Dancing with Daisies

love poem

art ~ Obrasky

 

When the last summer song begins to fade

a lonely melody through once pastel adorned skies

and the breeze holds the memory of a softer time

 

whispering through a dream of daisies

 

steal through the dimming light my love

and find me

             petals unruffled

laughing with the birds and butterflies

                     still dancing

                           because you love me

Reviews

[redzone]

most think of daisies they think of the old "she loves me, she loves me not.." of petals telling the joy or pain of love... but Julie, I like this version much better... of "unruffled petals" of "laughing with the birds and butterflies
still dancing
because you love me"...
have you ever walked and came upon a field of daisies??? wild flowers, everywhere and then couldn't resist the urge to just stop in the middle of them and lay down looking up at a cloudless blue sky. your poem took me back to that day... Thanks Julie, for the poem , but also for the memory.. ~~redezone

[MsJewel]

I spent most of my summer's growing up at my grandparents farm in the midwest. There were fields of daisies and wildflowers everywhere - such beautiful memories. I'm glad my poem brought wonderful memories back for you too! :) Julie

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Dancing with Daisies'
MsJewel,
'Just the thing' it is to know someone out in the world loves us. This can sometimes be the deciding factor to get a person over ruts of this life. I like the use of words like, "and the breeze holds the memory of a softer time." That is what I think of with summer. It is gentle, not brittle, harsh. Yes love brings us to a place of "Still dancing....because you love me." Thanks for the reminder to be thankful for such a blessing.
Kathy

[Tom]

It's nice to see summer is all year round in this delightful love poem !

[MsJewel]

Thank you Tom. I'm definitely a summer girl...not looking forward to winter. :) Julie

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

Those warm hearts keep us alive.. no matter the weather ..

Soft and sweet .. Nice Image too !

Jazz

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment! :) Julie

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

:)........................... YRW

[TL Boehm]

sweet and gentle and light - all the things a poem should be. Daisies are such effervescent flowers, just like this poem.

[MsJewel]

Thanks again! :) Julie

[Trace]

Isn't love a wonderful muse? your writing exemplifies your passion. Very nice. Trace

[MsJewel]

Thanks again sweetie. :)

[Rosaria_V]

Awww I loved this so much!! thank you for sharing your talent!

[MsJewel]

Thanks again for your wonderful comments. :) Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

So very soft and pretty, Julie. I could picture a woman laughing while twirling in a field of daisies. So emotive! A super love poem. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you for always supporting my poetry Lydi. I appreciate you! :) Julie

[wordwarrior]

Ahh Julie, another soft and tender poem. Your words are like a salve to the mind and soul. A poem filled with the glory of being loved.
Your imagery is truly stunning, your last four lines breathtaking.
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[MsJewel]

Thanks so much! :) Julie

[Luke L]

Lovely stuff, reminds me of hippies a very nostalgic piece in my mind. I also really like the piece you attached :)

[MsJewel]

Perhaps I'm a bit of a hippy at heart! Thanks so much for your comment. :) Julie