Outside Your Door

photograph by skiwasser65

 

 

Lost in the shadows, a single heart that grieves

                              too deeply to tell

 

            this stranger to your night

 

I shiver

in a breeze to cool to kiss away the tears

 

I close my eyes

   and yet I stare into the eyes of passion,

           the eyes of truth

                            eyes that dare not meet

 

                    in the shadows

   outside your door

 

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a highly emotive and intriguing write, Julie! If there is passion there, you can not disguise it. It will not go away by closing your eyes... the truth will come out. “In the shadows”...hmmm....brings to mind desire that is verboten. A poem with hidden meanings...and the graphic is the perfect one to accompany your words. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your wonderful comment Lydi. Have a lovely evening my friend :) Julie

[Solilokiss]

Wonderful. I just love the way you write!

[MsJewel]

Thank you forthe wonderful comment and compliment :) Julie

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

I love how the sinister side of this poem is counteracted by compassion, so much said in so few lines! nice job!

[Sasha]

"I close my eyes
and yet I stare into the eyes of passion,
the eyes of truth
eyes that dare not meet

in the shadows
outside your door


Amazing ..

[MsJewel]

Thanks again! :) Julie

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Dark and profound, yet full of a deep and passionate emotion. This was very intriguing. Wonderfully penned!

[MsJewel]

Thank you Gleb :) Julie

[s y e]

A dark tale of love needed to be written by your beautiful pen.

Kudos to you, I loved this one!

[MsJewel]

I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. Have a lovely evening my friend :) Julie

[Latifa]

awesome piece dear I like it

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

A dark tale of love. To be close and so far away. I like the photo. Gave life to the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[Eli Lane]

This portrays a feeling I have felt before. A heart choking on a loneliness that is so beautiful and sacred because it is lonely for one person. Great writing:)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Eli :) Julie

[Leigh]

Is this about one way love, someone waiting for their chance to get noticed by the person of their desires, 'eyes that dare not meet' has captured that for me. The element of the unfinished story adds a great deal more to the curious reader like me.

[MsJewel]

Someone who knows they should be ashamed for loving this person and afraid to let them know..fear can be paralyzing.. :) Julie

[Leigh]

OK thanks,