Dancing in White

~ written in a Monotetra form ~

photograph compliments of pinterest

 

 

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A whisper breaks the silent night

as soft cascades, brilliant and bright

send shimmers of warm diamond light

dancing in white, dancing in white

 

 

Like falling stars just shooting by

lacy glitter lights up the sky

with such beauty to dress the eye

a tear may cry, a tear may cry

 

 

As the night sky begins to glow

a snow angel appears below

wings flutter in the fallen snow

a gorgeous show, a gorgeous show

 

 

And as she twirls in graceful stance

a melody sweet as romance

seems to play and to enhance

this lovely dance, this lovely dance

 

 

I catch my breath, but not with fright

as soft whispers create a sight

to send my heart this snowy night

dancing in white, dancing in white

~~~

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful places and visions create by the poem.
"And as she twirls in graceful stance
a melody sweet as romance
seems to play and to enhance
this lovely dance, this lovely dance"
Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. I'm thrilled you enjoyed this one :) Julie

[Pushkar Prabhat]

beautiful......
love the rhyme and flow of this poem!
:)

[Simran Kewlani]

It is a beautiful poem. I love this poem a lot.
It is so descriptive and in a good way. Good work. (:

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[Al R. Arce]

Beautiful. But I still hate winter...

[MsJewel]

Me too! :) Julie

[Ruth]

As peaceful as watching a snowglobe, allowing the self to be placed in an alternate reality...soft and decadent, you weave a magical land through your words hon x

[MsJewel]

Thanks again Poppy! :) Julie

[Valeigh Starr]

I hear this as a song in my head, possibly using an instrumentation that includes glass armonica or some crystal instruments. It feels like a place where all is snow and ice, with the lone dancer at the center. It could almost be a music box or snowglobe in my mind!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment! :) Julie

[Bluefire]

Dancing in white, dancing in white.
I think this could very well be a song, maybe a dance electric song. I can just imagine it being sung by Oceanlab (mostly because that's who I'm listening to as I read this.
Well done, most enchanting!

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[Frieda P]

This is so graceful and ethereal, like that first snowfall, floats off the page like an angel into the heart...gorgeous Julie. :-)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Frieda! :) Julie

[Frieda P]

Getting snow at the moment, so it's fitting, although I like your poem better!

[mikeb9183]

It's really good but I think the last two stanzas can use work The verse about a melody as sweet as romance then you rhyme with enhance. Enhance isn't a romantic word and the imagery of imagining a romantic song playing isn't very magical. But it's a really good poem and cam be great with some work

[MsJewel]

Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I appreciate your suggestions. Thanks so much. :) Julie